改作文,找错误I like making friends because I think a friend is one of the most important parts in our life.Now,let me tell you my best friend,a 13-year-old Chinese girl called Carol.We both have long straight hair although hers is blonde.She is

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I like making friends because I think a friend is one of the most important parts in our life.
Now,let me tell you my best friend,a 13-year-old Chinese girl called Carol.We both have long straight hair although hers is blonde.She is good at painting and loves Dong Man very much.But I'm not good at painting.Her favorite subjects are P.E.,Chinese and art.But I'm not as the same as her.I love math and physic very much.She is more athletic and more outgoing than me and I'm calmer than her.However,she is a good friend because she can be a good listener and keep a secret.
As you can see,I don't think differences are important in a friendship.

第一句,think 可换regard...as...
第二句,tell 换 introduce...to...
后边13岁中国和Carol可用同位语或破折号表达
第三句,外貌描写 可分句,
第四句,and loves 之间加 she,
Dong Man:Comic and Animation
第五句可承前省略 She is ...while i am not.
第六句 subjects 也可省略,或替换为lessons/classes
后边but,可以写成 while mine are maths and physics
数学少s,物理是physics
more athletic :stronger.
more outgoing than me and I'm calmer than her.
不能理解,你可以写She appears outgoing while i appear calm.
because 后边:
she is a good listener,and she can keep secrets between us.
As you can see:In a word
in a friendship:没有a
本句可写为:I don't think differences play an important role in friendship!