Today,my school hold the opening ceremony in auditorium.So all teachers and students were present ,and part of scientists and officers were attended.The headmaster hoped all people made progress in new term,Then,some students got scholorship in past

Today,my school hold the opening ceremony in auditorium.So all teachers and students were present ,and part of scientists and officers were attended.The headmaster hoped all people made progress in new term,Then,some students got scholorship in past term.At last,scientists made speeches about thenselves experiences and achievement ,Then,I felt it make reference to me.

修改如下；Today,my school hold the opening ceremony in auditorium.All the teachers and students were present ,and part of scientists and officers attended.The headmaster expressed his hope for all people to make progress in new term,Then,some students got scholorship for past term.At last,scientists made speeches about their experiences and achievement ,Then,I felt it benificial to me.

Today, my school hold the opening ceremony in auditorium.All THE（加个冠词）teachers and students were present ,and partS（注意加S） of scientists and officers were attended.The headmaster hopeS（一直希望） all peopl...

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Today, my school hold the opening ceremony in auditorium.All THE（加个冠词）teachers and students were present ,and partS（注意加S） of scientists and officers were attended.The headmaster hopeS（一直希望） all people made progress in new term,BECAUSE（更富有逻辑性） some students got scholArship in LAST（上个学期） term.At last,scientists made speeches about THEIR OWN（语法） experiences and achievement.I felt it MADE reference to me.
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Today, my school told the opening ceremony in the auditorium. (Or the opening ceremony was held in my school's auditorium.) So, all teachers, students and part of the scientists and officers were atte...

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Today, my school told the opening ceremony in the auditorium. (Or the opening ceremony was held in my school's auditorium.) So, all teachers, students and part of the scientists and officers were attended. First of all, the headmaster gave a long speech expecting all the students to make grogress in this new term. Then, some of the students got scholorship, which they had applied for in past term. At last, the scientists gave speech about their own experiences and achievement. (I felt it make reference to me这一句你想说什么?你写的意思是我感觉它提到我. 你之前才写了科学家的成就.)你可以说,我可以从他们身上学到很多东西.I learned a lot from them.

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