帮我修改一下文章,主要是语法错误,以及用得不地道的地方 谢谢!When mentioned China, people naturally think of the Great Wall, the Forbidden City, the Summer Palace, etc. No doubt that all of these seem have been viewed as the s

帮我修改一下文章,主要是语法错误,以及用得不地道的地方 谢谢!
When mentioned China, people naturally think of the Great Wall, the Forbidden City, the Summer Palace, etc. No doubt that all of these seem have been viewed as the symbols of China, and remembered forever. All of these are the tangible cultural heritage inherited from our ancestors, and of which we are always proud. But, what could we leave for the world today in the 20th century?
I would it be the passion. When referring China, people see it a nation full of passion, for spirit wealth is more valuable than material legacy.
Action leads dream fulfilled, and the key to take action rests with passion. So the key to make dream come true is whether you have passion. Take Yu Minhong, the CEO of New Oriental for instance, who is a man of passion, and was admitted by Pecking University from an impoverished mountain area unitl finally achieved his success in New Oriental through repetitive hard times. Until now he has given speeches in different universities to encourage the young of new generations to fulfill their dreams with passion. During 4 years in college, we should live everyday with passion, and march forward to our dreams. This also reflects the responsibility to work, study and life.
I hope one day I could hear the evaluation is “China, a country full of passion”.

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When one mentions China,people naturally think of the Great Wall,the Forbidden City and the Summer Palace,etc.No doubt that all of these have been viewed as the symbols of China,and will be remembered forever.All of these are tangible cultural heritages inherited from our ancestors,and of which we are always proud of.But,what can we leave for the world today to remember us by?
I believe it is passion.I want people to see China as a nation full of passion,because spirit wealth is more valuable than material legacy.
Action leads to fulfilled dreams,and the key to action lies in passion.So the key to make dream come true is whether or not you have passion.Take Minhong Yu,the CEO of New Oriental for instance,he was a man of passion who was as a student from an impoverished mountain area got accepted into Pecking University and later established New Oriental and made it a success after numerous hardships.Until now he has given speeches in different universities to encourage the young people to fulfill their dreams with passion.During the 4 years in college,we should live everyday with passion,and march forward to our dreams.This also reflects responsibility for work,study and life.
I hope one day I will hear the praise that “China is a country full of passion”.
天上~