我写了一封英文信,但是英语不大好,有没有人帮我改改语法之类的,I write this letter is about visiting my dad and brother for Sponsored Family Visitor,I want to explain about immigrants refuse the applicant a Visitor visa and th

我写了一封英文信,但是英语不大好,有没有人帮我改改语法之类的,
I write this letter is about visiting my dad and brother for Sponsored Family Visitor,
I want to explain about immigrants refuse the applicant a Visitor visa and the reason :my mom travel in Australia end of the 2014/1/19 ,my eldest son is touring in China and he apply for a 6 months tourist visa ,
so my mother has to take care of him.this time my father and brother go to travel,that's why she can't go to travel.
I'm wait for my father and brother after Australia travel and I will go to China with them,
I will travel for 3 months,and then come back with my son.
2:is it Application for a Contributory Parent (migrant) (temp UT 173 holder) (CA 143) and given that this application was only commenced recently and the outcome remains unknown .applicant during this period they can't travel to Australia .because They have clear immigration motives.so you are not satisfied that the applicant genuinely intends to visit Australia temporarily.
3:although my dad is fill in the information didn't work,but he also have some investment enterprise in China,（similar supermarket,He has a small concern） .because stock no much,so he can't get any documentary proof.that's why on Form 1418 at Question 34,the applicant stated that he is no work ,but he has enough money to travel to Australia.
They has never visited the australia ,so they really wanted to visit there .they would like to know more about Australia's living habits and cultures .because they will live in australia in the future .therefore they are really look forword to this travel .they're honest account of their situation,their application for Sponsored Family Visitor is the hope that you can trust their just to travel.we provide all the true information provided.We don't know what kind of information you can trust them.I will pawn my australian citizenship for them .Australian citizenship is the most important for me.government agencies have the power to erased my australia citizenship if they are not back to China on time.I will sent my passport to visa officer,you can back to me after them to return.I do that hope you can give them a chance to travel to Australia,they Prepare their baggage ,they will start the journey .travel is also my brother 18th birthday present.I really don't want to disappoint their.So I apply for Sponsored Family Visitor gain,they are really just want to travel and back to China on time.In addition,there has them life and all them loving family,friends in China,and they will never leave them behind or live a life without them.my father living in china for 48 years and my brother grew up in china so that they have a lot of good friends and special things here too.my father very love my mother,he will not leave his wife.he want to not be alone for the rest of her life.

因为整篇表达有些混乱,建议附上中文,以便更好组织及提供翻译帮助.

从文章看,主要是想获取father及brother的旅游签证,整个文章的目的是让读的人去除“有移民倾向”的想法,但文章却不断让我觉得这种申请有移民倾向.所以建议找一个签证咨询公司提供专业意见,以便获得更大的成功概率.

特别是这一句：because they will live in australia in the future,以这句来作为这次探亲或旅游的目的,更让人觉得有移民倾向.

楼主，可以的，俺是英语专业的，过了8级，若是需要修改，加一下l俺吧。