请各位英语高手来为我挑错!本人写了一篇英语文章,自知其中有很多错误与不足之处.所以请各位英语高手来为我挑错.文章在我空间里各位在挑错时最好能提供相关的依据。

请各位英语高手来为我挑错!
本人写了一篇英语文章,自知其中有很多错误与不足之处.所以请各位英语高手来为我挑错.文章在我空间里
各位在挑错时最好能提供相关的依据。

以下是改过的,请阅读：
"...now the sky is blue,but i don't mind,because without you it is a waste of time..." (这句话我只是改了改,说得更顺口,但你加了引号说明他可能是原文,如果这样的话,你再改回去吧)
When I heard this song called "strawberry swing",it brought me back to 4 years ago when I and my friend left each other,and he was my best friend.
I can still clearly remember that day,which is Feb.4,2005.On that day,I met my best friend for one more time,but I just couldn't believe that it was the last day for me to see him.I was just thinking that we can meet tomorrow.When the next day came,I found that I could not see him anymore.What a pity!I didn't even have a chance to say goodbye to him!It has a really great effect on me.From then on,I realised how presious friendship is.That is why I always value friendship between me and my friends,since we first separated from each other.
When the date turned to Aug.5 2006,there was another seperation coming.This time it was exam result that seperated me and my friend,who is another type of friend,Caithleen.Caithleen was the monitor of my junior class.I have to say that I liked her so much.This feeling appeared to me from the beginning of the last term during my junior time.I was still hoping to see her and say goodbye to her.Once I was watching a movie called"the Crazy Stone",and after the movie is ended,I got a phone call from her.She told me that they have already said farewell to each other two days ago.It means that I can never see each other anymore,not even have chance to talk with her.Then I found that I was weak when the seperation has actually come to me.I said nothing on the phone,just hang up the phone quietly.That was my second time.Why does the same thing happened to the same guy twice?!
However,there's more.On Apr.7,2009,six days ago from now,the situation of seperation has come to me for the third time.I just can't forgive myself because this time the seperation is totally caused by me!It was me to seperate from my friend,my classmate who has been sitting with me for 190 days!I just can't bear to carry this mistake I've made.My eyes were full of tears.My classmate was a really good girl.I knew she needed help,I was willing to help her.Now it became a dream,but something so difficult to become true.I was useless!How could I leave her?I can never forgive the mistake i've made on tuesday,7th of April.
Then I found that,when the seperation has actually come,when it is the time to stay apart,I was too weak to do anything!I thought I was a strong-minded person,but in fact I'm not.She is stronger than me.I feel sorry for her for what I've done on that day.However,what can I do to get it back?I don't know.I was confused.
But I still have hope.I thought that I could never see my best friend anymore,but amazingly,he has come back the last year!It was really the best thing happened to me in 2008.
I have thought that I may not have any more chances to see Caithleen.But I was wrong again.She appeared at the bus stop for many times and it made me feel so good during the time.
In 2008,another good thing happened to me.I have got a good classmate,and I shared with her my understanding of friendship.I hope I can be with her together in the future.I believe I can!
Friends!Value the friendship you have today,and cherish every moment with them,and more importantly,don't let it make you down!
你看行吗?改了好久哦...对了,你的那个deskment我都改成cclassmate了,没听说那个词,不知道你说的是同桌(同学)吗?

感觉有很多的中式英语，许多句子其实几个单词就可以搞定了。文章较冗繁。

When the seperation has actually come,When it is the time to part
没时间全看 不过你的题目一定要纠正
Separation拼写错误
还有后半句
when it is the time to part
已改为
when it is the time to be apart