英语作文帮改错误Dear George, Long time no see.How are you doing these days? Next Monday I will go to the United States.I will be on Tuesday, the United States arrived at 8 p.m. local time 41.I'll go to the United States is pr

英语作文帮改错误
Dear George,
Long time no see.How are you doing these days?
Next Monday I will go to the United States.I will be on Tuesday, the United States arrived at 8 p.m. local time 41.I'll go to the United States is primarily a business but also have a short sightseeing, a total of three destinations, the first stop is Seattle, meeting a client, it will take about 3 days, and then the
next station is New York, I will take part in a 2 days training headquarters, the last is Houston, I will go with you to see a the scene of the Houston rockets game, stay 1 day, and then back to Shanghai.
I will buy a phone card and contact you when to Seattle, my Chinese number will also be opening brief international roaming, in case of urgent need.
I hope we can get together while I am there.
I will give you a call when I reach Houston.
Best wishes.
Yours truly
Li Min
我的本意：
下周一我将去美国.我将在周二美国当地时间的8点41分到达.我此行去美国
主要是商务但也兼有短暂的观光,共有3个目的地,第一站是西雅图,会晤一
个客户,大约需要3天的时间,然后第二站是纽约,我将参加公司总部为期2天
的培训,最后是休斯敦,我将和你一起去看一场休斯顿火箭队的现场比赛,停
留1天,然后返回上海.
我到西雅图后会买张电话卡（phone Card ）和你联系,我的中国的号码也将
开通短暂的国际漫游,以备急用.

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I am writing a letter to tell you that I will going to America next Monday and will arriving at 8:41pm on second day.For this trip,I not only mainly for busy business but also take a short sightseeing with relax. With my schedule,there are three destinations,the first trip,Seattle,meeting a clinet with 3 days,and then the next trip is New York ,I will participate in my headquarters training with 2 days. The last trip,Houston,I planned to go with you to watch the scene game of Houston rocket with one days,and then return to Shanghai.
When I went to Seattle,I will take a phone card to contract with you and my Chinese number also open the temporary international Roaming in case of emergencies.
Your respectfully,
Li Min